The Burden Comments

Julia, an eloquently captured portrayal of unrequited love, like the way you have chosen to tell it from the perspective of the one who cannot reciprocate. Wonderful use of language that gives this poem a certain edge. Warmest wishes, Justine

Julia, certainly a poem true to life... the burden of unrequited love. It weighs heavily... good poem! Brian

A little masterpiece! So well focused and the words so apt and well chosen. I love 'It weighs me down, I bend, I hunch'. Well done.

Dear Julia or Jewel, Yes, a one way relationship is unhealthy for everyone involved. This is a well-crafted poem that clearly shows the one side of the object of affection who doesn't return the feelings. A solid and expressive poem. Good writing! Kindly, Hugh

Overwhelming emotion. That's what I see in this, Jewel. The speaker's apparent selfishness and heartlessness ('a debt I won't repay', 'how can I make you go away', 'a miser') only reinforce her urgent need for escape from this relationship. Jewel, in keeping with the nickname that I use on you, your poem is no less than a sparkling gem. Saluting you with warm regards and a score of 10, Gina.