Bri, I will attempt (poorly) to comment in your style. Here goes
Line two might read smoother if you left out gender. Just 'since for many Americans slimness is an idol'. Syllable wise I think this would help the rhyme without losing anything since Americans are both male and female making the listing of the two redundant.
Best line of fat 'Being fat can help anchor you in a storm'. I never considered this, but it would seem quite true
Slender people must have strange pallets. I wouldn't mind the juice or goose, the rest sounds like torture
(I'll try to be honest and from the truth not far reach) ? ? This puzzles me. It reads a bit like Yoda speak and there's no rhyme to accompany it
Best rhyme in slender 'they've got more room in store aisles, airline seats, and in bed
and less reason, when elevators arrive, to a lack of space dread'. **side note: lack of space dread might make a good title for an anticlimactic alien invasion flick**
All of tall sits well with me. No complaints and I can't even pick a favorite line because I have several. Though I must ask, do people really pick lemons themselves for lemonade? I've never even seen a lemon tree. At any rate, it works well here and is most amusing.
I went into short hoping to see something to the effect of; you might not get on all the roller coasters. Then I realized that's not an advantage at all. Good job not using that!
'You have more under sink room for yourself and plumbing tool'. I haven't tried to get under my sink since the hide and go seek days of childhood, but I dont think I would fit in the cabinet anymore. This would indeed be an advantage of shortness
Altogether Bri I loved this piece. Funny, lighthearted, and imaginative. It must have taken a bit of time eh? One of my favorite humouress pieces I've seen on this site
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Bri, I will attempt (poorly) to comment in your style. Here goes Line two might read smoother if you left out gender. Just 'since for many Americans slimness is an idol'. Syllable wise I think this would help the rhyme without losing anything since Americans are both male and female making the listing of the two redundant. Best line of fat 'Being fat can help anchor you in a storm'. I never considered this, but it would seem quite true Slender people must have strange pallets. I wouldn't mind the juice or goose, the rest sounds like torture (I'll try to be honest and from the truth not far reach) ? ? This puzzles me. It reads a bit like Yoda speak and there's no rhyme to accompany it Best rhyme in slender 'they've got more room in store aisles, airline seats, and in bed and less reason, when elevators arrive, to a lack of space dread'. **side note: lack of space dread might make a good title for an anticlimactic alien invasion flick** All of tall sits well with me. No complaints and I can't even pick a favorite line because I have several. Though I must ask, do people really pick lemons themselves for lemonade? I've never even seen a lemon tree. At any rate, it works well here and is most amusing. I went into short hoping to see something to the effect of; you might not get on all the roller coasters. Then I realized that's not an advantage at all. Good job not using that! 'You have more under sink room for yourself and plumbing tool'. I haven't tried to get under my sink since the hide and go seek days of childhood, but I dont think I would fit in the cabinet anymore. This would indeed be an advantage of shortness Altogether Bri I loved this piece. Funny, lighthearted, and imaginative. It must have taken a bit of time eh? One of my favorite humouress pieces I've seen on this site