The Black Bee - Original By Rabindranath Tagore Comments

I find your imagery original and well articulated. Your metaphorical style demonstrates unprecedented skill! ! ! Keep it up! !

Yes, my heart understood immediately what you wrote. A beautiful poem, Asif.

I really enjoyed the imagery in this poem and it is fluent and well structured. There is always a question mark however when starting with someone else's work, particularly when the work is of such a celebrated poet as Tagore. I looked at his original and this is certainly a stand alone work in its own right, not a copy. I would encourage you to develop your own themes, you definitely have the talent.