The Beaten Track Comments

The lesson from a fretful bee has given best result that you have so wonderfully composed as - By treading through the beaten track, / We might perish like the trapped fly./ For reaching out into wider skies, / We may take as well a different route. The title of this poem is well appreciated and it is understood clearly at the end. Beautiful poem with lofty theme.10

like the new poem of yours i just commented on, valsa, this one has vivid description of something i have witnessed. this has some parallels to a poem of mine, choices, where a different insect is featured. poignant tussle is a great phrase—not only is it descriptive visually, but tussle summons the sound of the fly beating itself against the glass. -glen

Amazing Poet.. Nice observation of little fly.. and for most creatures do have this trail of Beaten Track in the landscape we Humans carved so unnaturally.! Thanks for sharing Poet!

Valsa, this is an amazing, profound poem. I suppose the beaten track may be called 'beaten' because it points to defeat. It is truly sad that so many of us would cling to that beaten track, kept on course by the fear of the new, the fear of the unknown. A 10.

By treading through the beaten track, We might perish like the trapped fly. For reaching out into wider skies, We may take as well a. different route. - - - - - - - - How through your minute observation and your beautiful words you have penned this poem of great wisdom.

Alas! Across the room, quite close, Lay open the door, it never did see, With hurdles none to block its way, Or hinder it in its forward flight. Yes, many people do not wait to think and see the door. Great wisdom. Thanks for sharing such a nice experience.

A great write with a very useful message. How you have illustrated your point is praiseworthy. Your keen observation and wisdom are evident in this amazing write.10

Of my quiet home! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

We find ourselves in similar situations often, sometimes through ignorance and sometimes stubbornness thanks Valsa-10

We often have bees trapped in our extension which is mainly glass. I did have a special gadget for trapping them and releasing them in the wild. Lost it though. It is a very clever poem with a fine message as Akhtar said. Another ten. Tom

By treading through the beaten track, We might perish like the trapped fly. For reaching out into wider skies, We may take as well a different route. A meaningful stanza, the right path is always open but we ignore it and try to rise through the wrong path,