The Ballad Of The Slums Comments

I had tears even before the last stanza Few will care but you can see it from afar The hearts of many will be touched by this read For your compassion shone in the way you plead

You have captured the plight of the underprivileged ones in a very touching manner in this very sensitive poem. I do empathize with each line of it. (10)

They too are rightful heirs to Nature's bounty Nature belongs to everyone not just those who grab it. It must be shared. Thank you for bringing this to attention of everyone.

The last two lines are incredible and very moving and the whole poem is moving. You have a great capacity for precise detail and this enhances the power of the message. On my favourite poems' List without a doubt. Tom Billsborough

A thought-provoking poem with a message for all of us...10 points.

A great poem, a touching poem, a master piece by Valsa George.

Impassioned. Sensitive. Intelligent. You awake your reader to the horror of the slums by appealing to their hearts, their souls, and their minds yet you do this driving your poetic skills to a striking advantage. You don't over-do and you don't under-do. Given the topic this is hard to do. But restraint gave these lines the power to propel themselves into our hearts and minds and souls there to sprout roots and grow compassion. Well-done, Valsa. 10 of course.

Marvelous write. The pain and the plight of a slum-dweller's existence is so excellently portrayed here with great empathy and sensitivity. Very well-worded write that speaks volumes about your poetic skill. A significant write that gives voice to the voiceless. A big 10.

'For them joy us an unknown flavour'! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

A sad yet commonplace observance. How can anyone live with themselves knowing that they have ten times (and in some cases, millions of times) more than they need while so many have absolutely nothing. In great countries like yours and mine, there is no excuse for such disparity

So many, everywhere exactly as you so graphically yet eloquently described. Small children never making it to their teen years no less adulthood...ravished, and broken from famine, disease and in many cases terrorism. Through precision imagework, you lay the facts out, along with your message to the Reader with captive parlance and Eye-pleasing structural movement...Your close-out is exactly what it should be....POWERFUL....So many people here don't seem to grasp the importance of an impacting close...They either employ one too soon, and place an anti-climax on their work...or they get lost somewhere in what they wanted to do...but lost their train of thought, and thus, a potentially solid piece of work, one that poured on & into their audience...alas ends in a drizzle....Solid Crafting, young lady... ~FjR-'16~

In the alleys where darkness strangulates light. Superb imagination. Thanks for sharing the beautifully envisioned thought provoking aspect on the slums portrayed in a ballad of the slums.10 points.