Tuesday, August 9, 2016

The Air We Breathe Comments

Rating: 5.0

The air is so clear and pure
on summer mornings I feel doubly
blessed in its presence as if
there were another force, equally
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Daniel Brick
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Magdalena Biela 25 May 2017

As the Phoenix dies in a show of flames only ro be reborn from its own ashes, so we slowly disolve into the air with every walk we take, only to obtain new powers to arise...we decompose before being whole again into the nature: and this is the secret that only Nature and we know, everytime we take a walk...

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Pamela Sinicrope 23 August 2016

Nicely expressed. The theme of air is so prevalent in poetry and I've been especially attuned to it lately, that I'm sure that is what must have brought me to your poem this morning. Doubled air is a beautiful metaphor/symbol for the openness/readiness of the speaker in the poem to receive all that nature/the world has to offer. There is so much beauty available to us, that we need to be ready to receive it. I love the degree of enthusiasm expressed by the speaker in the lines, 'Oh, simply praise this divine abundance! ' Use of the mirroring term also illustrates how the beauty of our earth reflects the beauty of the divine and you've done a great job of showing in this in your brief poem. 'the doubled force of air. It is a worthy pastime to learn how nature works just by being alert: ' These lines are critical to being fully alive, to being a great poet/writer, and to be a productive active part of our world, nature, the earth, and to opening the spirit. Well done Daniel. I enjoyed reading this. Thanks.

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Nosheen Irfan 14 August 2016

I'm reminded of great Wordsworth n Pantheism to read this wonderfully written poem. If we pay attention, we can sense that Nature has a spirit too n God's presence can be felt in every object of nature. A parallel existence of physical n spiritual world is beautifully depicted here. We find peace in nature because we can feel a presence in it that we can connect with n count on. Lovely write. A big 10

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Bhargabi Dei Mahakul 09 August 2016

Clean world is better visible in two layers of pure air. God has created and offered this air for our existence. This is so clear and so pure that we clearly visualize this. Summer morning gives the feeling of double effect. Walking in twisting path on the bank of Salem Hill Park memory turns in to poetic expression that amazes minds on readers. This knowledge raises our eyes to Heaven is true. EXCELLENT POEM! ...10

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