The Abandoned Poem Comments
I wrote a long poem
for you this morning
in the pure light
of an untouched day.
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Almost one day which has gone into the making of this poem. I sincerely appreciate the lucidity of expression... great
Nicely written piece and your wording was great. I enjoyed this. love this so much, I love to write as well, have my own poetry so please check my site 2 :)
A beaitiful poem and imagery. I was hook from start to end. Thanks for sharing such brilliant work
Thanks for the beautiful poem and the priceless and highly praiseworthy notes you have provided for us. Thanks for the sharing and thank God that you belong to our times. Would love to visit your page over and over again. Regards Subhas
Words are illusive, and so they make love more attractive and meaningful. The words in your poem tell us this truth perfectly. Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem with us. Chandan
Stunning and that's high praise for a good love poem is hard to find. As I read the poem I was totally captivated by the story.I particularly loved the last two verses. I love that line sifting through your mind to find the words closest to touch and silence, one can almost feel the intimacy in the space between the words. Then in desire, in anticipation, words dissolving into gestures. It's sways like a dance. Nothing sappy here but a deeply tender love poem. A delight to read.Thank you Daniel
Remember Monalisa? She is the very definition of love, with her smile like an abandoned poem...Your poem is Monalisa's smile...
Oh How Heart Warmingly Beautiful! ! ! ! ! Love The Flow And Feel Of This Poem! ! ! ! ! Excellently Done! ! ! ! ! Thank You So Much For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! Many Many 10S! ! ! ! ! +++++
79 comments! well, some are from YOU! did i leave one already? who can remember? ? ? ? i'm still reading, but i HAD TO TELL YOU...........WoW! ! ! ! Wonderful! ! ! ! favorite part so far: For those hours of composing, the words performed miracles of desire, produced wonders of expectation, and then - i 'love' alliterations, especially when they fit so well: silent, sullen, sorry I'M done reading. What happened NEXT? ? ? ? ! ! ! ! what, What, WHAT! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ? OK, let me read the Poet's Notes for clues? i like it, and i always appreciate having a Poet's Notes, helpful or not. this could easily touch some hearts in a a showcase. hmm? of course, my heart is too cold to be affected. the words/thoughts are, however, scrumptious. yum yum. to MyPoemList. bri :) give me candy on V-day and i'll be happy. make that ice cream! with or without cake.
Daniel, every woman, man and child should be given this treasure on Valentine's Day. From your heart to theirs...from their heart to yours.
I appreciate so much what you say here, that my poem can speak to so many people, that they will all find nourishment in it. That is why we write poems ultimately isn't: to touch people's hearts and be touvhed in turn.
Daniel Brick, A masterful depiction of the influence of love withing the actions, of a person, that is how emotion shakes up the person's expectations. Reality and what we wish could be real within has to start somewhere. If we have a dream or goal it surly starts in the imagination. This story of yours really showed how that looks on paper..Thank you so much for taking the time to share this poem. I was really touched by it! Blessings, Kathy
I noticed there was no obvious Love in this poem that embodies it. A feat, and wonderfully done, pulling us into a poem on paper. I love the poem on sheets of paper that is about writing about a poem about love.
I like the way you inked the love feeling...and the fact that as a poet words can fail too words are such perfect traitors: they make promises that warm you, like summer light, they create spirals of hope.
Yes, i know Cixin Liu. The Three-Body Problem created much of a stir in China, hope you could enjoy!
Wow, the wisdom of love flows from the poem and the note is really touching and impressive! When Raymond Carver talked about love, he said 'I could hear my heart beating, i could hear everyone's heart, not one of us moved, not even when the room went dark'
Thanks for your enthusiam, Anne. That is a wonderful quotation from Ray Carver whose early death was a great loss to literature. I think his writing style must translate into Chinese fluently, and for that matter be very accessible for you to read in your second language. When I read his stories, his language is transparent and so moving. I just bought a Science Fiction novel by a writer named Cixin Liu. It's his first book translated into English. Do you know this writer? It's called THE THREE-BODY PROBLEM.
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