Thursday, March 10, 2016

That Which Is Entirely Truth? Comments

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The
chaste
the meek
those proud
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Michael Walkerjohn
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Dimitrios Galanis 13 March 2016

A great perception, but, dear Michael, do reshape it.Make it three poems.Avoid ''Chasma''[either seeded in/ deception].You can not seperate ''in'' from ''deception''.That is called chasma.Each verse has to have a full meaning.Three poems without chasata will be great.

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Michael Walkerjohn 13 March 2016

Aloha Dimitrios... A wonderful investigative comment... I thank you kind sir... I have difficulties with the posting capabilities on this site... this is in its original form a 'center justified' work... copy this to word, bold the text, center justify the page, and you will see the designed form... chasma is an unfamiliar term to me in the context of content... IAM reviewing this now as I reply to your directions... however, I gave this write a great deal of attention... returning to clarify my points from the intro and within the body hoping to have the effect upon a wider readership... I post on a dozen or more sites... and search through my works to find such the mind as you... thought filled, probing, experienced, and demanding of an excellence in craft... this interruption of continuity is most certainly improbable to clarify in the overall trend of this piece... and I will work on this in my future posts... IAM trying to empress my thoughts upon a more potent group of minds here... and as these thoughts confuse and conflict IAM able, through the help and direction of bards as you, to increase my abilities in creating clarity instead of chaos in my posts... In a diatribe such as this is... once you see the original form, would you please discuss with me the direction of verse and full meaning further? I have a handle on the ideal of such, but it is in the fine tuning of the subject and points of such, that I present confusion to the more avid reader... I do so wish to end this trait in my posts to this readership... This is currently my most international site... I receive comments from many well educated and knowledgeable bards... and IAM so thankful that you have taken your time to offer me guidance... All of the best from this life, to you, and all of your relations... MIchaelw1two

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