Sunday, May 8, 2016

That Uncertain Smile Comments

Rating: 3.3

Her smile may be like fire.
But don't assume desire
Your feelings in a whirl
Dreaming of some future bliss
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Tom Billsborough
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tom billsborough 19 March 2018

Ah, but the friend might be younger and better looking than me! Maybe there is a stop of jealousy there! I do love making women smile. A most rewarding occupation without necessarily any thought for a reward. Usually that smile is enough. He was married so it's a bit cautionary too.

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Valsa George 19 March 2018

Enjoyed your frivolous attitude and the innocent fun of your day dreaming! Your advice to your friend not to be in haste to make a proposal and wait in queue for the porridge ladle is so clever as you think you have a greater claim on the girl and hope to be served....first!

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tom billsborough 18 January 2018

Hi Ludolf As my reply button isn't working still I'm having to use the Comment! Shopping wouldn't be the same without a bit of fantasy. And our supermarket girls really are a charming bunch! and I really don't mind signing autographs! (in my dreams) . I've one or two of yours to catch up on. Been doing editing a lot recently. Will have a good read tomorrow

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Ludolf Dauphin 17 January 2018

Lovely people, I couldn't help but smile because this poem remind me of someone i know. thank you for sharing.

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Bharati Nayak 28 June 2017

A smile is just a smile. So collect your bags and file Off please. I'm waiting To be served. It's me she fancies Naturally. - - - - - - -A fun filled poem- -brings smile to me.Thanks for sharing.

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Tom Billsborough 28 June 2017

Thanks, Bharati. Sadly the last bit isn't true! But I do think a woman's smile is the most magical thing on earth!

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Bri Edwards 25 June 2017

Tom, into my/our July 2017's showcase by popular (my) demand! ! bri :)

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Tom Billsborough 26 June 2017

That's very kind of you, Bri. Of course in real life you get ahead of me in the queue and whip her away from under my nose! Yes, put it in to your Showcase. Thanks, pal.

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Michael Walker 12 March 2017

A delightful daydream about shopping in a supermarket. I like the ending.

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Tom Billsborough 13 March 2017

Yes, these conceited poets! Actually the check-out girls at our local Morrisons are very pleasant. And we sometimes daydream!

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Diane Montemayor 25 December 2016

Dear Sir Tom, I love the poem..hahahaha, , i catched you looking at me, said the clerk...My smile (clerk) maybe like a fire, but do not assume desire, , , hahaha, , , oppss, , , men are dreamers, , , , nice poem sir Tom.... Smiling alot, diane

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Tom Billsborough 25 December 2016

Yes all men are except me, of course! I'm just conceited!

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Seamus O Brian 08 November 2016

Yes, very nicely done. Much truth engaged here with pithy charm and wit. I dare say it calls to mind one of my own pieces that was almost titled Try not to Fall in Love with Your Translator Again, but without the pithy charm and wit. I also should add that I too am quite familiar with the porridge line, even if not in such concrete terms.

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Tom Billsborough 08 November 2016

Nor me, luckily! I'm told that Prison porridge used to have the appearance of cement, so concrete migh might be apposite!

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Indira Renganathan 31 October 2016

A deep and strong theme written in a light and funny way...indeed a good poem-10 Thank you Tom for your kind comment on my poem

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Tom Billsborough 31 October 2016

Glad you liked it. I must read more of yours. They are really excellent. Tom

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Julie Smith 29 September 2016

This is very cool and funny :)

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Tom Billsborough 30 September 2016

Must say our Local check-out girls are quite nice! Of course they spoil it by asking me to pay for the shopping! but always with a nice smile!

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Bri Edwards 25 September 2016

if anything, i enjoyed this poem today more than on 8-15-16! i can relate to this scene, being an older man who fancies some of the check-out girls! they check me out (my groceries) while i check THEM out (you KNOW what i mean!) . but we (guys) have to be careful. it might look suspicious if we did our shopping five times on the same day! bri :)

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Tom Billsborough 26 September 2016

Only five, Bri! Either you are getting lazy or successful! Thanks for comment. Tom

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Greg Davidson 11 September 2016

Observations turned to shared joy for those who read it. I loved the images that these words evoked in my mind.

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Bri Edwards 15 August 2016

'love' these lines. She is her own person With her own reason For awarding you that smile: You called her by her name Her shift is over in a while You've put your card in upside-down She may think you're a clown. i wasn't sure what was meant by check-out girl at first. when i read about putting the card in upside down, I STILL wasn't sure but THOUGHT you might refer to a female time clerk in a factory where the homeward-bound workers were punching a time card. do people still do THAT, like i did for years in the post office? ? then it occurred to me [i think i always misspell occured the first time! ]..............that you probably meant a credit card, at a restaurant or MORE LIKELY at a grocery store (bags was my clue) . this is a very fine poem which gives us all insight into what Tom Billsborough is ALWAYS thinking about the check-out girls! ! ! to MyPoemList. bri :)

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Tom Billsborough 11 September 2016

I'll have to stop going to that Supermarket every half hour and buying just one item. Might become an obsession!

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Sriranji Aratisankar 25 July 2016

For awarding you that smile: You called her by her name Her shift is over in a while You've put your card in upside-down She may think you're a clown. Oh God forbid, my friend! But really in the end A smile is just a smile. So collect your bags and file Off please. I'm waiting To be served. It's me she fancies Naturally. Tom, this is an example of natural flow of wtiting.10 for you.

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Tom Billsborough 25 July 2016

Thank Sriranji. I love womens' smiles. Pity we men didn't smile more often, though some of us try. I know your poems give me a very warm feeling. Tom

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Wes Vogler 25 June 2016

My kind of poem. Well couched old chap. That last line was an absolute must or you could never have ended it.

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Ludolf Dauphin 13 June 2016

Enjoy this one, that is very interesting and yet so true. A smile is really just a smile and nothing more indeed.

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Tom Billsborough 13 June 2016

Yes, it is wrong to make assumptions. but I guess we all do! Thanks and I enjoyed your poems Tom

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Pamela Sinicrope 28 May 2016

That was great! The title pulled me in and I enjoyed this...put a smile on my face with my coffee this morning. I take it this is based on truth, based on your author's note. Just loved it. Good writing and good fun. Thanks Tom.

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Tom Billsborough 28 May 2016

It's based on what someone told me about a very pretty till girl. He really thought she fancied him. I was too kind to disabuse him of his fantasy. Actually our local supermarket is a very friendly place and most of the girls are very nice and always give you a pleasant smile. The last line is just jokey. I don't assume any of them fancy me! In an way I'm celebrating the fact that women smile a lot more than us men and it's very much appreciated. But we should guard against over-optimistic assumptions! Tom

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Roseann Shawiak 11 May 2016

Totally loved this poem, your humor is infectious and pleasing to my heart and mind! While reading it could not refrain from smiling and in the end laughing right out loud! What a wonderfully refreshing poem this is! So glad I came across it! Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn

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Tom Billsborough 11 May 2016

Thank you for your comment. You ladies smile a lot more than we dullard men! And it's the most beautiful thing in the world, whether the girl means it or not! Of course there's a touch of jealousy in the last line. She's not yours, mate.. so hop off. she's mine! Of course she isn't but we men are such dreamers! Many regards Tom

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Unwritten Soul 09 May 2016

Hahahaha...you are a fun person, and funny too which is a good character to see...Thank you for your kind words on my pen name... yeah cat can be a big boss... they just say meow and mean could you please help me this and that hahahaha..hahahaha you are really fun

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Tom Billsborough 09 May 2016

my cat is using me as a sun shade at the moment. we come in useful at times like these. let's hope he hasn't another play fight planned. i was scratched to ribbons last time. If it had been a football match, it would have been about 5-0 to the cat. Since I've just come in for a strong black coffee I'll take a break and read a couple of your poems now. Tom

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