Saturday, October 18, 2014

That's How Sun Dies Comments

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When all birds flew back to nest, for rest,
Sinking sun into west when floated very fast
Heavy hands and hazy mind when lost its zest,
Then I am quite sure, he is losing vigor bast,
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Edward Kofi Louis 15 December 2015

Nice work with the muse of nature! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Heather Wilkins 30 October 2014

something lost something gained enjoyed the read

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Gangadharan Nair Pulingat 27 October 2014

A good life thought poem the poet created and I likes it.

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Ging Taping 22 October 2014

And everything happens for a reason but the reason is still a mystery until it happen. -ging-

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Sallam Yassin 21 October 2014

What has lost and what has gained that is eternal question and you brightly profoundly projected

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Khairul Ahsan 20 October 2014

The whispering thoughts at the dying moments: 'What have I lost and what are my gains' is a timely reminder to the living mortals. A nice, philosophical poem

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Hazel Durham 19 October 2014

Very moving, as his last thoughts of his life flash before him he lets go of the pain he endured at times and his glory days as his soul moves into eternity! Beautiful write!

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Louis Rams 18 October 2014

the sun breathes its last breath as the moonlit night covers its face.

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Khalida Bano Ali 18 October 2014

A great thoughtful poem

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Denise Zhou 18 October 2014

I like it, it's really elaborately written and kind of just nice

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Neela Nath Das 18 October 2014

What I lost and what I gained- - - - - -is the thought of Everyman.A universal tone is here in this write!

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Savita Tyagi 18 October 2014

What have I lost and what have I gained. These thoughts whisper; he is breathing last. Very effective lines of a great poem.

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Md Asadullah 18 October 2014

Exactly, these are the thoughts when one is dying, the real gain is the gain of hereafter, nice one :)

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Babatunde Aremu 18 October 2014

Great write! Reflections on our gains and loses in life is common. Thanks fos sharing.

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Shabeeh Haider 18 October 2014

Beautifully and elegantly described. Loved this poem Have a look at my poems as well

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