That Rainy Morning Comments

i think you could have done more with this- it had great potential. i wanted to like it, more than how it was written, however. i'm not sure what it needs- i guess lines are a bit jaded (& i kno my work is too at times, thats how i recognize it) . you did paint a vivid picture with your array of words here & it was refreshing in that it was simple & straightfoward. keep up- best care, sus.