Saturday, February 20, 2010

That First Sip Comments

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The taste rarely leaves your lips
Of your first gulp of your first drink
But you rarely realize it
Because it's the first time you've used this drug to swallow the pain already inside
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Ashley Stone
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Ashley Stone 22 March 2010

Thanks so much Jane! I don't drink either but I hoped to effectively capture the pain and turmoil that goes on with alcoholism based on what I've noticed from others. I've seen this struggle when everything goes downhill and you don't even realize when. Before you know it your first sip has stained your lips. I hope i did that well.

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Wow, I love it. I've never done this before, but I've always heard that you can never get the sensation of what it was like the first time. I think you really captured that idea well and showed how it can trap you into the cycle of trying to reach something you will never get. I love the second to last stanza! Like I said I've haven't drinken, but it sounds so true! I also love how you told this story. How someone started off drinking to push away the pain and had to keep drinking to keep holding back the pain and possibly even to hold back new pains found through drinking. I love it. And I love how you keep mentioning the first sip. Splendid work!

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