Sunday, March 20, 2005

That Evening Comments

Rating: 3.5

As we relaxed in easy chairs,
And heard each other - yet did not,
We recounted our past loves again
And sipping beer
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Philippa Lane
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Poetry Hound 20 March 2005

I like the sentiment of this poem - two people brought closer through recounting past loves - but my car swerved off the road in the last stanza. I think I sort of know what 'chrysalis-confined' refers to - that the friendship is no longer at a limited early stage, right? - but I couldn't figure out 'But past-regardless, necessary.' And I had to veer around your new word 'trepidly.' Good job, though.

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