! ! That Day, When No One's There, I Stand At That Street! ! Comments

it is beautiful... painful but beautiful, i love the description

A lovely description of hurt and loneliness, you write well.

A poignant piece, written from sad experience, I suspect. Your delivery is very evocative. My only query is the line 'I downgrade my face'. To downgrade is to reduce in importance, whereas I suspect you mean downcast or look down. The final few lines are particularly poetic. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

The picture of loneliness...very real, its a pain to be alone when others are with their mates....fine write!