Thanks-I-Am-Giving~~~~~(Ghazal) Comments
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In my life there is room after room of good things
my man is one room for whom thanks-I-am-giving.
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The morning breeze, the blue birds, Hoof beats...are so poetic imagery and cleverly used as similes and working here very well, over all in this lovely poem we can feel the inspiration of self conscience, and she encourages the readers to copying her and collecting all good things. 5 stars *****
Yes, Soran, collect all those good images and sounds and feelings and blend them together for memory's sake! ! Thank u 4 the stars!
Robert M Smith- -Thank you so much for enjoying that line! ! !
The morning breeze is bringing a brand new essence the blue birds are singing and thanks-I-am-giving. . Hoofbeats rain thunder singing through the desert night and the hills are ringing with thanks-I-am-giving......thrilling expression. So touching. I love these lines. My pleasure reading it time and again.
I so appreciate the implied compliment when readers come back and read one of my poems over again
A beautiful heart is speaking through this poem.Wow- - - - - Thanks -I -am- giving.
Bharati, thank you for saying such a kind and uplifting thing to me. One thing I am thankful for has been the opportunity Poem Hunter has given me to meet lovely poetic hearts like yours and thereby know that good is still flourishing in the hearts of most writers on earth and evil has only a few devotees.
Dear friend, I am pleased to hear that. It seemed to be up your heart's alley! ! ! Your poems are so gorgeously immersed in life and its textures that I think you give thanks-giving every day you wake up!
Astutely depicted. Wondsrful imaagery and imaginar. Beautiful poem. The beginning of this poem is very interesting.. Thanks for sharing.
I agree- -the first two stanzas were much better than the others... perhaps a rewrite is in order!
I hadn't heard of this poetry form before and was glad to have an opportunity to read your lovely poem. We do have so much to be thankful for..the wonderful people in our lives, our stunning planet and more so to read talented writes such as this little beauty that reminds us to be truly grateful.
It is far easier to complain that we don't have this and we don't have that and that the necessary things are too expensive- - but a short trip outside and a glimpse of puffy white clouds or the white contrail of a jet taking people to faraway places, or a bird hopping across the lawn or a child wobbly-riding a new bike past...... simple things but beauty and peace is made of small things too. I hope you try a Ghazal- I bet you'll be outstanding at it as well as your Senryus.
Great wording that blends with the title very well. It's a soulful and heart warming piece, elegantly crafted to commemorate the Thanksgiving Day. Thanks and forever remain blessed Susan.
Thank you, Chinedu, this poem was an absolute blessing to write! ! ! May we all find blessings in our life!
it is a new experience for me to read such kind or work it it is a lovely piece of art. I enjoyed reading this Ghazal
Thank you for reading and enjoying my Ghazal- it is a fun form of poetry to write. Do give it a shot! ! !
I just came across this one (since I don't see anything recent, scold, scold) and I love how you were able to assimilate yourself so artistically into this eastern format. I certainly can't speak Urdu/Persian/Hindi, but you accomplished the lyrical beauty of the style flawlessly all the while maintaining your individuality, and giving us an intriguing peek of Susan in sari on horseback singing Ghazals. Well done!
Yes, I have a huge hole in my posting here- but it was an unwilling absence- -my router fell ill and died and I lost internet connection and it took almost exactly a month to get a new router from my internet provider. Now I have been busy the last two weeks trying to catch up on all these comments you fantastic people have written on my past poems. I'm glad you liked this piece. I don't know how good it is to a ghazal purist but I know I enjoyed the heck out of writing it! Thank you Neal - I am trying to write a poem so I won't be scolded anymore ;)
Wow! ! ! Simply Beautiful! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Heart Touching! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Very Very Inspiring! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Beautifully Described! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Your Words Shine So Brightly! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Thank You! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! Many Blessings! ! ! ! !
Again I so appreciate the enthusiasm with which you read and comment on poems!
Every day my life kite is tripping through the sky and time zones are zipping but thanks-I-am-giving. . The morning breeze is bringing a brand new essence the blue birds are singing and thanks-I-am-giving. . Hoofbeats rain thunder singing through the desert night and the hills are ringing with thanks-I-am-giving. .- - - - - - - - - - - -Love your poem.Wonderful thanks-giving- resonates in my heart too.
Dear Bharati, I so love the style of your poetry and the beauty of your mind and soul so it pleases me to the core when I write something that appeals to your poetic taste buds. Thank you! ! ! !
A true Thanksgiving. And a very fine poem with great imagery, the kite and the bluebirds. Wow!
I hope you and your daughter had a lovely Thanksgiving and that Mr. Purry left you a bite of turkey! Thank you for reading and commenting!
Tom, thank you for reading and commenting on this- -I hope that you and your daughter had a lovely day and that Mr. Purry didn't eat allllllllllllll the turkey!
Who would dare question the songs of bluebirds? The morning breeze has indeed given you reason for thanks! , wonderful poem! ! !
Thank you, bill for reading and commenting. I must admit I had fun trying my hand at a ghazal! !
Simply superb. Beautifully written. I love the repetition of thanks-i-am-giving. You have tried a new form of poetry and done an excellent job. A super 10
Thank you, Nosheen. It was fun to try a new form. I'm rather looking around for something else that is new to me yet not too difficult for me to do. Thank you for the super dooper 10! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
Great thanks-giving poem. Really musical. I wish we had an audio of this uploaded here sung by someone conversant with the intricacies of ghazals. (10)
I'm glad you didn't suggest that I sing it. I have a voice reminiscent of a crow with a bad attitude :) Thank you for calling this musical==that sounds like something a ghazal should be
Love and life! Sharing with all in peace. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.
Wow, love this Susan. Had never heard of this form of poetry before but i really enjoyed it. You are truly gifted to be taking on such a challenge and have it come out like this! Always wonderful work. You never disappoint me. A 10!
Hey, thank you for such kind words, Theo! ! ! Try one- -they are a bit of a challenge but oh so satisfying when completed [hehehe].If you Google ghazal it will give you several different criteria for a ghazal.... since each of them is a legitimate choice, I chose this one- -each line has the same # of beats, there is an inner rhyme, a repetition of a phrase through out the poem on every couplet's last line, if I remember right there was to be a minimum of 5 couplets... ah, found it... A Ghazal is a poem that is made up like an odd numbered chain of couplets, where each couplet is an independent poem. It should be natural to put a comma at the end of the first line. The Ghazal has a refrain of one to three words that repeat, and an inline rhyme that precedes the refrain. Lines 1 and 2, then every second line, has this refrain and inline rhyme, and the last couplet should refer to the authors pen-name... The rhyming scheme is AA bA cA dA eA etc. It's fun... if you like puzzles and who-dun-its! ! ! Thank you for the encouraging 10! ! !
This form suits your writing style! Love. Thanks I am giving for Susan sending poetic gardens that take root in the sky. Well done. I haven't read allot of traditional Ghazals, but just finished reading a collection written by Jim Harrison.
Why, thank you! ! I hadn't thought of it that way but it does fit in with my style. You are a very discerning reader. I worked at this one and I've been thinking I would like to try another. I need to read more of them to get into the rhythm of them- I do like the repetition and the inner rhymes of the form. Thank you so much for this encouraging comment, Pamela! ! !
Hi Pam, When we speak of traditional Ghazals, we should read them in Urdu/Persian/Hindi.. Even if you donot read these languages, you could listen to them rendered by Ghulam Ali, Jagjit Singh-Chitra Singh, Mehdi Hassan etc., so you could get familiarized with the format. The form is not strictly poetic, it is rather musical. Susan's effort is really commendable and I enjoyed reading it aloud!
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Every day my life kite is tripping through the sky and time zones are zipping but thanks-I-am-giving. . The morning breeze is bringing a brand new essence the blue birds are singing and thanks-I-am-giving. . Hoof beats rain thunder singing through the desert night and the hills are ringing with thanks-I-am-giving.