Texas Love-Song. Comments

Well crafted Gary. The beauty of a poem is in the involvement of the reader, and this one is well worth the emotional immersion. Strangely, I served for some time with the 2nd Bn. Scots Guards, and I had a yellow Texas Rose myself. I shared every minute of this poem with you, right down to the last heartbreak. My only critique is that you stepped back into archaic language when we are now well into bringing rhythm and rhyme back to the fore. So modern words are better for the grasping. You need a way to find an equally poetic way to express this verse. Though many leagues of distance lay, ‘Twixt England and the USA, (maybe (From England to the USA)) A cable-cradle lets me lay, Beside my love in Texas. Still a 10 Well done.

What a great poem. Such creative verses! Good thing the state was Texas and not Massachusetts! Love all the Texas references, yellow rose, lone star etc. Such a lovely poem it makes me wish the outcome was a happy one.