Tequila Is Better Than Tea Comments

Just follow the process I outlined for you in the last poem. You see, Amelie, I too show mercy. But mercy, as you know, is not endless. Best for you to keep that in mind. Denny

That's a fact.50 times. This poem, I think, needs amplification

Hemingway rewrote the final chapter of his finest novel A Farewell To Arms 50 times to get it right

There are several studies, in fact, on endings. Ending poems, novels, short stories, etc. can be real tough a lot of the time, right. It can be with me—decisions, decisions.

The book The Sense Of An Ending comes to mind, written by an English professor over your way, in Scotland, teaching at Edinborough University some years back. You can google the title to find it.

This poem is complete as is if you wish, but, for me, it ends too quickly, the end coming too quickly based on the words, language you speak before. Poetry is spoken, right?

Incorporate others into you, what Pound or Eliot, don't recall which right now, called ‘a compound ghost' as we all have them, need them, in my case Oppen, Bronk, Wallace Stevens, Eliot, Pound Shakespeare, and several other poets.

Okay, one more poem to comment on, this one as I liked your word choices — best diction I have yet seen from you, some of it borrowed, right? That's okay as poets steal all the time, Yeats, Eliot, me et al.