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My mind is imprisoned.
Time has a stranglehold over my existence,
a psychological headlock,
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Philosophical point of views often are not apt to form a lyric point of feeling verses demand. Especially to us whose english is not the native language.
Your points are debatable (although I do hear you) . The feeling is there. The feeling was always there. The thought of losing a loved one to time (third stanza) , haunts me and I'm sure others. Once someone understands that stanza, the poem as a whole could be viewed differently. But then again, it's just a poem and the reader is responsible for bringing it to life.
I have translated the poem and submitted it here in PH to be published.In my verses it sounds indeed so nice.Perhaps I could not appreciate its english sounds, feeling and meaning of the language.
Maybe, I'll record a spoken version at some point in the future. Hopefully that will enhance the reader/user experience. Thanks for highlighting language limitations.
I believe trust in the pervading stream of consciousness a gift of our transitory world. Family and friends a remembrance of the relationships created in lifetimes of... Thoughts, actions and development. Great write, made me think!
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7/25/2025 8:58:23 AM # 1.0.0
Having recently lost my wife, I can fully understand this very fine poem. Whatever you do, do not attempt to lose this person. By celebrating his or her life, perhaps you will undo the Gordion Knot.
Tom, sorry for your lost. I'll catch up with you over private message.