Wednesday, April 7, 2010

Temptation Sensation Comments

Rating: 4.0

Time to go now, but not for good.
Sleep is calling and so is food.
Needing to clean, I run abound
Till I find you on the ground.
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Andrew D Robertson
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Richard D. Remler 27 April 2010

Sharp, jagged rhythem, seems left to its own in parts, some unfinished thoughts that force to reader to use his/her imagination. I like it. Unusual. . I had a problem with the word glee though. Scary word. Gave me chills. But an interesting, thoughtful read. Thanks for sharing.

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