Saturday, March 4, 2006

Teenage Boys Walk Like Drunk Monkeys Comments

Rating: 4.9

My dad used to say
Back in my distant day,
When we were teenagers
We were being trained to kill
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Gina Onyemaechi 04 March 2006

And I see this all the time in my line of work, Vincey. But listen you 24-year-old, teenage male culture was like this even when I was that age, and, I daresay, at least a generation before that as well! Anyway, poignant and entertaining writing. And thanks for your comment on 'For This I Ache...' (no, I'm not going to tell you what it means. You work on it like you say you're gonna!) : -) Warm regards and a score of 9 from Gina.

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Scarlett Treat 04 March 2006

Sorry, but you get a double comment from me on this one - I meant to tell you to go back with your editing pen and correct this work some. There are some misspelled words, etc. that need correction. Scarlett

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Scarlett Treat 04 March 2006

If I had ever used that word on my mother, I would have worn my head backwards, and then, when my father heard, he would have turned it back around for me the other way! ! ! ! But never fear, there is hope, because there are STILL some great young guys around who respect my gray hair, God Bless Them....Scarlett

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Charles M Moore 04 March 2006

Great write, and very relevant to todays youth.

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Declan McHenry 04 March 2006

It's a clever piece Vincent with a great take in last lines. Please, though, run it through a spell checker. They are worth their while and will enhance the final product.

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