Thursday, January 31, 2008

Tears Have No Gears Comments

Rating: 4.2

OH NO
Not again
Please no waterfall
(He with his hands to his head)
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Mary Havran
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Robert Gentry 04 February 2008

I like it. There is that touch of everyday drama that plays out in the background of life.

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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr 31 January 2008

I like the dialogue style, that you astutely employ here, Mary. Poetics has but one rule of thumb...and that be that there are NO RULES in Poetry! Your lyrical style is melodiously adroit, however, to be literarily diverse, and enable yourself to explore & master a vaster spectrum of poetic styles...is what architects ta true accomplished writer.True, thispiece may in fact strike a different chord from your usual repertoire, but in my literary world different is good, & creates opportunity to be better...And that in itself is good.Very Nicely done, Mary. ~ FjcR ~

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David Taylor 31 January 2008

Dear Mary imHo you forgot the music, the message is good but to reach the heart they need the music that was there before the words, IMHO. Love from David

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Mary, this is an okay poem, IMO. It is appropriate for this website and for the folks who come here to get 'in touch with their feelings'. Keep writing...as the more we do, the better we get. 'Toodles.'

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