Your body is warm against mine.
Our hearts beating in time.
Your hands trail my sides,
and now there's nothing to hide.
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Very Nice! I was starting to lose control! ! ! Just needs a space between first two words. :) And maybe more space between you two! ! ? Yes! To My Poem List Bri :)
Thank you for finding my mistakes. As always I appreciate your commentary and feedback. :)
Hi Chryssie, Very beautiful poem on love. Wonderfully rendered. Reminds me of my first love. But, I have objection to a few phrases you use: No longer will we be pure- Not True at all. In fact love makes you pure; purer..... I believe, this is what we should clearly assimilate... Those words slipped. The forbidden words. - Yes, it is natural that words slip when you are to express your love for the first time; for the nth time. I do Agree. But, they are not THE FORBIDDEN WORDS . On the contrary, they are the most beautiful words ever spoken on earth. Whether spoken by Eve to Adam or by Crystal Pierce to her lover! ! I have no doubt, those are the most beautiful and heartfelt words I have spoken to anybody in my whole life.. Take care. All the best. A perfect 100+++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++++ -unnikrishnan