I walk; carry the weight of the sands, dust particles of gold
Beneath, lay the tomb, resurrected in chamber of seven
Headed snake, guarding the abandoned soul of Princess Tamara
From Hanaring, the city of guardian angel
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Nice naming: Tamara Princess of Satira. I like that... and the poem is great too. Thanks.
sounds great dude...you've got a talent that could never be questioned
passionate when read feeling that i was tamara who's love is so be on those who see her
ك ل ا م ج م ي ل ج د ا very nice ++++++++++10
very whimsical and charming poem and I see it has been well recieved here at the site. thank you for the invte...... J. L.
thanks for sharing to us the elegance of mayati... keep writing!
I think I've read this and posted my commets. Still, this time around it sounds to me like an epic, a romance for and from the gods, to bless or destroy. You seem to stride across several cultures - ah! the gods blend all in your soul, my friend. mark.
The good thing about your poem is its disposability, quickly changing the name of the 'princess' and retaining the substance. A lot effort is here, to save yourself some ground against the odds and discovery of the treasure. Some scenes are from the 'mummy II'.10 from me.
Thoughtful tribute to a woman powerful enough to turn the prince's gray heart red.
hi...mate havent you changed it.... i think i commented on this and it was differnt but this improvement is better...yes it shows uv spent time improving it well done cheers
simply AWESOME! ! pretty sick! ! gotta go read the sequel...
Hi Sulaiman. Dropped by and read your fine work and gave it a 10, Thank you for sharing.
i mean i m left speechless....u r simply superb...and ya give me sum tips to enlarge my vocab...n nw i m goin to read the sequel..so bye
o, man! ! ! you have a good vocabulary and good rhymes. great job
From: Richard Jarboe (stockton United States; Male; 60) To: Sulaiman Mohd Yusof Date Time: 8/1/2009 6: 44: 00 AM (GMT -6: 00) Subject: tamara very passionate. good work, richard
very deep in thoughts indeed. i felt as though i was in the pharoah's time. great piece
Beautiful words and images. I loved your poem. : -)