Saturday, July 11, 2015

Tales Of A Child Comments

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Once upon  a time,
Tales of a child in his juvenile prime
Parents were broke
No attention got paid on time
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Abdulsamad Brainbucx
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Brainbucx Beebucx 11 July 2015

thank you.. will surely take to correction

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Brainbucx Beebucx 11 July 2015

Thank you for your support...I will surely take to correction

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G. Akanji Olaniyi 11 July 2015

Rewrite this stuff in lines, try using rhymes or repeated words to add emphasis; then you become a poet. You also need more imagery! Read other poems and poets, too! You shall surely be fine! Welcome on board! ! ! Mar' aban hallan wa saalan! ! !

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Kelly Kurt 11 July 2015

Wonderful thoughts, Abdulsamad. A nice style and rhythm. My only suggestion would be to lay it out in single lines and not paragraph form. Thanks for sharing and keep writing. Peace

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Brainbucx Beebucx 11 July 2015

hello, members please I need your comments about this poem... thank you

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