Once upon a time,
Tales of a child in his juvenile prime
Parents were broke
No attention got paid on time
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Thank you for your support...I will surely take to correction
Rewrite this stuff in lines, try using rhymes or repeated words to add emphasis; then you become a poet. You also need more imagery! Read other poems and poets, too! You shall surely be fine! Welcome on board! ! ! Mar' aban hallan wa saalan! ! !
Wonderful thoughts, Abdulsamad. A nice style and rhythm. My only suggestion would be to lay it out in single lines and not paragraph form. Thanks for sharing and keep writing. Peace
hello, members please I need your comments about this poem... thank you
thank you.. will surely take to correction