Take My Life Comments

Great poem- edit better

Those frustrations in youth are very common. Wait for a moment with hope. Hope is the spark that lights the whole life. very well expressed pain and frustsration. sathya narayana

this is good write of verses...but Lord should be capital letter at the start... keep on writing and edit your verses...

This is a fine piece of writing and I recommend it to the reader. You used repetition well and constructed the poem with skill. Your word selection was good. It was not too long as some tend to make them so. Time well spent. A keeper. GW62

hey rohan, excellent choice of words--hope yur pretty lady has responded. keep up yur gud work -u will be a great poet regards anju

great strength and wording. nice work, hopefully alone you may see that you are not alone. excellent write, you take the words and make them flow, yet every emotion is portrayed silently, like a whisper, just waiting to be heard and understood. excellent job.

This is absolutely your best work. You really show a promise of talent here that I could ony glimpse before. This is excellent writing. Pour your lonely thoughts onto the page and they will free you from their actions. Write and your lonely thoughts of death upon the page and they will take flight and leave you with smiles, pride and a strengthed talent. Write every day and you will be a writer. There is nothing better. Excellent, may God bless you.10+

Very poignant. I hope that the lady of your dreams responded. Strength for the journey, my poet friend. Warm regards, Sandra

this is ur best poem! its really good. but ur true love will find u when ur ready for her. and dont let other people control ur life. ur life is in ur hands, not theirs. stay strong, and if u ever need someone to talk to, i'm here. =)

this is an amazing poem that needs to be shared with the world!

This is the tragedy in everyone's life. Lack of love. In this busy world, there is no time for anyone to set apart time for a talk with love. A touch of emotion is revealed in this poem, but it should not go to the extent of committing suicide. For every action there is a reaction. Hatred begets hatred and love begets love. So, when one starts loving others, he or she will get back love, in return.

well done this poem take's the word's right out of my mouth. keep on writing.