Tuesday, May 4, 2021

Surrender To Wishes~ Comments

Rating: 5.0

The evergreen tree of wishes,
When demands manure for its survival.
To make the roots deep and hard,
Little soul surrenders to the body's whims.
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M. Asim Nehal
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Darren Jkoeryo 07 May 2021

When the golden arrow is fired by the wish, It pierces through all the priorities, The heart sinks like pebbles in the water, And the time sucks energy from the age.

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It becomes too late when we realise that was all an empty race, so void to reach nothingness. Excellent with top stars

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Absolutely dear Asim ji. The tree of wishes keep growing in us demanding more and more from life.

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Shreya Hacks 05 May 2021

Class: When the golden arrow is fired by the wish, It pierces through all the priorities, The heart sinks like pebbles in the water, And the time sucks energy from the age.

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Poetic Sky 05 May 2021

Slave of dreams.

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Deepak S S 04 May 2021

Arrow fired is fantastic metaphor.

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Deepak S S 04 May 2021

5*** poem.Nice work.

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Deepak S S 04 May 2021

We get tricked by the heart to follow our wishes to reach nowhere.

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Suman Jones 04 May 2021

High on philosophy 👌 clever writing

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Mamta S 04 May 2021

We follow our wishes and find nothing in the end.

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*Sunprincess * 04 May 2021

Wonderful poem. You captured the beauty of human nature.

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