Sunset Comments

Increadable imagery my friend. Well done!

a sweet then bitter poem of the realities of being alive? ...........well written.

A very powerful write on sunset. Amazing imagery. A fellow poet on PH recommended it. I thank him because it's a must-read poem. Great work.

Hi Afrooz, I enjoyed reading the poem- I have read an ancient sanskrit shloka (though I an unable to recollect it) , picturising the sunset (Sandhya) as the parting of lovers sun and earth and sun sheds his blood unable to bear the separation, though it is for a few 'pahars'. Your poem reminded me of it. Beautiful. Excellent image expressed in most suited phrases. I would invite you to read a poem by the same name posted today in ph by my friend, Ms Nosheen Irfan. Thanks.

Whoa! I love poems about sunsets....but I've never read one where the sunset was alive and reached out. This is a really cool poem. I felt your pain. Very well done.

A beautiful image that is projected concerning the setting of the sun.

Then a hand out of many hands of the dark Came into my chest And crushed my heart. Great imagination. you are gifted with the faculty of imagination. make the best use of it to create, write and publish.. as a literary student and teacher, you can do it. do not hesitate. i shall wait for your great creations. thank you very muchl. tony

Excellent English! You'll forgive me if I don't correct all of your poems, though!

A beautiful poem, Afrooz. With the corrections you have made, it is flawless.

Afrooz, your poem is intense and heartfelt, tenderly touching the silence of the heart. In your second line, the word, dark I think would sound better as darkness. When the darkness swallowed it. See what you think. Thank you for sharing, RoseAnn

dear Afrooz, there is a typo: 'bood' - blood