Sunday Is Visiting Day Comments

it's a very touching verse. ms. batool brings fresh air into the way one may offer one's comments on a poet's work on this site. i now see substantial criticism emerging on these pages!

It is uncommon to encounter readers familiar with the patterns and techniques of metrical forms like the sonnet. In poetry, what is said is inseperable from how it is said. A bonus for a poet who accepts the challenges of traditional forms is a reader who watches him or her risk a pratfall while skating figure-eights. Shahzia Batool is just such a bonus.

poetic merits: unlike traditional petrarchan setting where octave is divided into two octosyllabic Quatrains rather it is divided into two quatrains of shakespearean alternate-rhyme abab, cdcd...the sestet is divided into two tercets but the rhyme is repeated... the rhyming ofthe words is full ear-rhyme, n its magical touch can be felt in numb, n come... the language is simple but rich in feelings, , , the low tone of a waiting person is v obvious... Sometimes I sulk- forgotten castaway, Convalescent, strapped into a wheelchair, Watching the windows, watching the whole day For kin or steadfast friends compelled elsewhere. the theme is cruel, n cruelly painful.... reader can share the feelings w/o effort...it's beautiful sir!