Sunahsepha 6- Mother Comments
My matula Vishwamitra was a great sage
Famous for his power of penance, that
Could secure the heavens for Trisanku,
And for his temper, not tempered by his age.
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Very touching, awesome description of mother's love, divinity within, though I have no idea about the real epic, I like reading your simple verses, thanks for the invitation, keep writing, thanks
Great going E.S. Ji. I believe you have supplemented the abundant imagery of the original with your own. I wish I could read the original Sanskrit verses. There is Valimiki Ramayana available on net but that opens rather clumsily and I am not sure which are the verses you are dealing with. The last stanza of yours is rather gripping. I felt I was myself running in panic. Very effective rendering. (10)
Now I knew no fear, my mother was with me Lead kindly light, my mother's love with me! - enjoyed reading your poem....voted 10
Thank you Marieta for reading the poem and penning down your opinion on it. Your words are of immense value to me. I appreciate your valuable time. Thank you.
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8/8/2025 2:28:17 PM # 1.0.0
Fingers of rain long and slender - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - now that is a very visual phrase! ! ! ! I am enjoying the story poem here and I think its plot is enhanced by beautiful phrases like this. 10++++ oh... uh...5? ? ? ? ? ? 5 just doesn't have the ring of 10... I am such a rebel I will still select a 10 rating... ;)
Hi Susan, Thank you for reading the poem and for the 10 points. But I am not satisfied by your 10++ Can you give a little more?
hahahahahahahahaha I would give it a thousand but PH has these rules and is so picky about us adhering to them! ! ! !