Wednesday, September 11, 2024

Suddenly, Nothing Was Working Comments

Rating: 4.0

Suddenly, nothing was working,
the wheels, they ceased to turn
the moon forgot to rise at night
the sun no more did burn.
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Valerie Dohren
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Noah Body 11 September 2024

Excellent' loved the rhythm and rhyme.

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Lyn Paul 11 September 2024

Lovely to read your work Valerie. I have been doing so for 10 years. Beautiful words as always!

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D.N. Rebb 11 September 2024

I wonder how long it all momentarily ceased

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Valerie Dohren 15 September 2024

You've answered your own question - momentarily!

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Dennis Ryan 11 September 2024

Well done! Really? Well … overdone … but it is Southport, isn't it … ‘tis a pity …

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Valerie Dohren 15 September 2024

What's your problem with Southport, it's a lovely town full of lovely people!

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Dennis Ryan 11 September 2024

The rest of the world is okay. But that's the English, well some of them anyway, prone to exaggerate—like you!

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Valerie Dohren 15 September 2024

I don't exaggerate, and I'm not rude either!

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