Thursday, January 4, 2007

Strength Vs. Weakness Comments

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Slamming on the bed
slap marks burning red
forced down by all his weight
touches from him i hate
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Kelsey Bachmeier
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Ryan M 11 January 2007

i really am at a loss for words. that was your best work. and like that other comment mentioned...best final line. I hope this wasn't a true story. keep it up...

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Ray Mesa 09 January 2007

This one is equaly your most amazeing and horrifying work i have read so far, it reminds me of the first chapter of 'Lovely bones'. But that ending is really a deep wound, it truely had a cut to it. Touchy subject for me personaly, but has the best final line I've read in a long time.

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