Stranded In My Brain Comments

Excellent poem. We learn so many things yet few remains elusive.5 Stars*****

Despite my 'suggestions' etc. I give Stranded In My Brain ***** five stars, perhaps...partly....because 'Brain' looks so much like my REAL first name, Brian! !

'matrix': (one definition) 'A situation or surrounding substance within which something else originates, develops, or is contained.' Maybe here matrix refers to 'challenges' and current circumstances?

Kingsley, my favorite line is 'Or just maybe I said 'yes' when the gods said 'no' ' I don't personally believe in gods or God (anymore) , BUT what else IS/are there to explain all we see/hear/feel/think? ? ? I don't have a (good) answer.

Gee, 'hanging nowhere' does NOT sound like a pleasant place to be! ! ! stanza 3: I'd say 'were the odds', not 'was the odds'. And I'd use 'plan', not 'planned', a typo perhaps?

(cont.) 'noun plural The projecting overhang at the lower edge of a roof. The edges or lower borders of the roof of a building, which overhang the walls, and cast off the water that falls on the roof. Brow; ridge.'

st.2: I'm SURE you don't mean 'heaves'; look it up, ok? Maybe you meant 'eaves'? (cont.)

(cont.) *** ' 'get the gist' refers to the act of quickly understanding the basic or central point of a piece of information, a story, or a conversation, without needing to comprehend every detail.'

1st stanza: I gave some suggestions [[ not that you asked for any! ]], and I'd say more, but.... ;)) I DO 'get the gist' ***, I think, of your thoughts. (cont.)

'Sometimes the future looks [ perhaps try 'so bleak'aps ] bleak That with the two eyes open you see nothing [nothing good? ]. All around challenges compound ['pound' perh? ] you about That you wonder the possibility if any To extricate yourself from the matrix [perhaps 'is possible'].

Kingsley this is truly wonderful TFS

An excellent poem. Each stanza stands alone and stands out.