Story Of A Computer Comments

An excellently worded poem about a computer, beacuse some words are not clearly written, at least for me as the reader, so this poem has a tiny hilarious tone. BUT you wrote a finest poem about the most used instrument for us all: Computer. I have enjoyed this precious poem

There is nothing remotely poetic about these chopped lines. You need to improve the punctuation, the grammar, and the logic of what you are saying. I can`t enter into details due to space, but this is bad poetry