Stereotypical Man Comments

I like the forthrightness of this piece. I think it could be clarified some. There's an underlying harm in what the man says, a harm found in most stereotypes, but I like that the poem moves through language in a conversational way and doesn't hit you over the head with a lesson. I think you could maybe use some details to make your message stronger-I'm not sure in what way. I feel you have the framework of an even better poem here.

i dont actually understand this poem...but the way you have written this looks good