Stay Here With Me While Dark Shadows Fall Comments

" A villanelle is a poetic form with nineteen lines and a strict pattern of repetition and a rhyme scheme. Each villanelle is comprised of five tercets (i.e., a three-line stanza) followed by one quatrain (a stanza with four lines) ."

p.s. THAT (above) was a workout for me! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! :) bri

4 – " call To me from realms beyond I cannot flee, " i'd expect " which" before " I" , BUT...i'm not sure you are saying what you mean to say! ! I feel this poem has a lot of promise, but falls short here and there. NOW to copy and paste elsewhere (my comments) and then break into lengths PH will accept! ! bri :)

3 – I wish you used more punctuation, and i think more proofreading may help as well. I've noticed the rhyming words. Sometimes i feel maintaining a rhyme scheme causes a poet to skimp on other parts their poem. I'm not saying this is true here. i really like " face the wall Beyond which those so near are yet far away Before the end" (cont.)

1 – line 3 closes, not close line 4 i'd put a comma at end line 5 i'd put " with" after " me" line 7 " me" is/was on her/his cell phone? ? line 9 gall bold and impudent behavior OR bile? (cont.)