The pedestrians whether young or old
Even the terminal even cold fire crop
Must look at me! ay my face for a moment
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One cannot get rid of his inherent human nature.Lust is one of them, depicted nicely.
The idea behind the poem is good and if edited further, its power can be multiplied several times over...
I guess we men are pretty much the same here! The comparison with the statue is very clever. In the second stanza I'm not sure of the wording although the meaning is clear! Do You mean I know some who look at two(breasts) first. If so I think the first should be the last word. This is a minor point in what is a good and original poem. I'd give you an 8
You have struck the chord with readers by fixing a common topic..there are many such beautiful statues in the park.....but beauty is not just skin-deep...it is a real divine feeling to praise beauty... thanks for your hair-raising lines...
Even I succumb to looking lower after meeting the eyes. It is instilled in us by society and media.
Whether young or old! Learning the ways of life. Thanks for sharing.
I think we should not generalise. However, I appreciate your style. Thanks, Sriranji.
There is no getting rid of a piece of art as statue of stone, its power sure can capture every pedestrain's eyes, i am one among them.