Spying On Me? Comments

it is the shadow of love seeking to be found, you must grab it but you don't know how

Very nicely written. I am a huge fan of free verse (no restrictions) :) I found the sentiment here very sweet...longing, yet playful. I only suggest in the second stanza: line 7 maybe change frighten to frightened; and in the final stanza maybe a breathy whisper would be a nice replacement for a loud voice (I feel kinda sheepish correcting someone's writing) . I just thought it would set the imagery a little sweeter. :)) Overall wonderful write. I enjoyed the read. BJ

awww...heartfelt..this something about this poem that made me go through it so fast, i wanted more :) very well done..

Just awesome. No other words can express the beauty of this poem.

its crazy man.. sometimes i feel like im being spied on too, but i figured hope is playin games wif me... oh u should check out one of my poems called Soul Searching' i think ud enjoy it

Hallunications.It happens when you are long lonesome to reckon with some kind of thoughts.This poem and every verses represents somewhat that.Fear grips in the heart if the spying is gonna be for something good or somewhat bad for impressionism on life.Silence then has to fight with the silhouettes.Time is the best answer for the eyes on you and the hidden motivation if any.Very well expressed verses and i appreciate the theme here

This poem is extrordinary! well done, and beautifully written! :)

a beautifu language with beautiful drama in the interest of a great theme, a sublime beauty seeking theme, this is what the poetry all about, beautiful structure besides meaningful content, both together, to serve that dominant master that we call him in simple: beauty, , beauty to you my great_hearted friend, , yours//ph.d//a//k//

Secret admires are not always so secret. Sometimes all you have to do is ask. Then like the breeze just a moment ago. It's gone. It's part of the past. You and her are now lovers. All because you spoke up before it was to late. Yes sometimes the heart will break. But you will never know with a wasted chance to take.