Thursday, January 3, 2008

*spinning Girls Comments

Rating: 5.0

She went round, round on one spot
Till her heart thumped, her head ached, giggling
Flumaxed, smiling, eyes searching, shrilling laughter
Panting, striving to keep her feet, her head spinning
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Sylvi Sylva
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William Jackson 03 January 2008

Great alliteration, visual images, sensory details. A kaleidoscope of fun!

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Broken Peaces 03 January 2008

A bag full of emmotions collected and arranged on parchment nicely done my friend top marks Chris

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