I offer myself as…… clay
Spiky spine of ego removed
Make me unmake me
Knead me into deformities
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That ''I offer myself as…… clay/Spiky spine of ego removed'' needed to be simile but just finished to be a metaphor.Just perfect.I love it.10++
very interesting and clever, you once again write a great one!
WOW..a wonderful powerful writing.. sincere desire to be as a clay, may be can be given as a gift on a plate of love to her.........excellent... loved it....10+++++++