Sparta Praha Books 1: 1 (Lyric) Comments

blowing it and then trying to gropes a broken wave gets louder singing wonderful expression by the rare imagery of nature, wllpenned,10+, thanmks for sharing

Not bad at all, much improvement Egi...

You have great imagery, although as Allie says, sometimes illusory...Coach

Hi There. at one with the sea and in tune with it. an interesting peice well done. Regards Dave T

You have a great love of the color and sound of the words you use, though in some lines, the sense is illusive. Nonetheless your poem is very lyrical and your emotional connection to the ocean is strongly made and enthusiastically delivered. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥

this is great i realy like the formatung and the feeling behind this peice

great write..I wish to listen it when sang......10

Not tick, silent and death...........praising voice in ocean fog are some good ridden words here, worth a notice! ! ! ! good job egi! ! ! ! A 10.

likely mood, there should be another chapter, right?

nice poem- powerfull enough to to remind us of oue 'rise and fall; birth and death' the human reality....keep it up pal

Lovely use of colour and change. Cudos! I love it! The words make make more sense if you space and group them into verses though. Like for each colour has its own verse. Other than that BRILLIANT!