~ Sousedouse Dipdouse ~ Comments

Lovely...I hope you will be famous May

Nivedita You are an exquisite weaver of words.The comments on your poems get me closer to their meaning.But I would someday write a poem like yours and present it to you. Continue surprising us with your enigmaticmagnetic esoteric poetry.

‘SOUSEDOUSE DIPDOUSE’ nice word coupling … styling-titling Appeal is just and help is must…thanks Poet for such gesture We find for oldies poet delved deep into their inside ….of there solitariness and old age voidness ….straight appeal, ‘Eurekaize my elegance’ Wow! ! Dame Jane is morning roses/For twilightage John/E’er nears n’ closes….words of great assurance …thanks 10+

It was a poem that was very hard for me to understand, but after reading it twice it began to come across. Thanks for the invite niv a good poem. Lynn

‘…Your adrenalite agitated inn/Soothe in my emotive endorphin…’ Adrenaline is sympathomimatic and Endorphin [brains own luller] Poet’s observation on widowmen is very right….psychic voidness they suffer from… And very romantically young damsel leniently as extra bonanza loved to share romance to fill the voidness Indeed a paradigm shift 10+++

It is very touchy poem…recent news accounts for that ~ Celeb Liz Taylor [late seventies on wheel chair] for 9th time going to marry a man in late forties…what poet anticipated and in celebs it is common… And common in commons too …her eyes are very penetrating and heart is very feeling Excellent poem thanks Ma’am 10+++

Finest love poem with twilightage and risingsun age well blended and in romantic flavor… Poetically not ‘mismatched’…in reality…? Definite 10+ Dr. V. PS Note Humble Submission...and it is the 'The spot' of the poem...

i rated this one positive ten!

‘Young Jane laid fullheart Without any if and but Straight and curt For old John a fresh start. What I understood about the Poem and empathicoromantic [empathic + romantic] Poem it is… enjoyed it to the lees 10++

Like fairytale … offbeat romance …may come true in numbers some day... ‘…Dame Jane is not // Will-o’-the-wisp // But red nip // Sip n’ sozzled n’ sip…’ Wonderful lines… gritty and palpable… 10+++

An old adage ‘a kick of wench is better than embrace of golden ager’ LOL! … Here we find reverse swing…Dame Jane swimming against the current…BOLD conception…Daring… But the 'Submission' is worth contemplating… Who can Sousedouse Dipdouse…? Hey young Dames are you listening? Come forward and be trendsetter. 10+++ AB London

Wonderful write dear writer, Like a symphony of old piano, it can called carol of sentiment, but it is original vision to hurt our hearts, and to force to thing our brains,10+

Hi NIV - I am honoured to read this beautiful emotive Love Poem and write a comment - especially as my name is John and a very favoured John features in verses 8,10,11. I score it a worthy ten - on every count. To me the poem is an entreaty and an invitation - to those beyond a certain age - to still be prepared to explore the delights of love with a younger partner. There are mentions Twilightage (> 70?) 'Age no bar' 'O'John race heart beat' (The luck of the Irish LOL) and 'Twilightage John' and the Lady is 'Rising Sun age - 20 to 30 perhaps. The invite is quite specific to enjoy the delights of Jane's young and virile body - The language is cryptic Fluffy edge - Crazeamaze - Pink bosoms carpet - red nip - Eurekaise my elegance (I love that one) - sooth in my emotive endorphin (I wish I had written that line) - Sousedouse - dipdouse (this is full-on) etc but the nuances are crystal clear - this is the great art of emotive poetry - well don agin NIV you are awesome. To call this poem erotiic would be an understatement. Love you in Poetry - JOHN X X X

niv this is beautiful words flow 10