Sometimes it just feel like I've let you
Down with my head pointed down
Fascinating is the ground just knowing
Deep down I won't always be around to the
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It would sound better when smaller.Try each verse to have a meaning of its own, do not break it in two verses. The best meaning as a conclusion must be on the last one or two verses. Very good the effort.
Painful! ! Facing the ways of nature. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.