Thursday, October 18, 2012

Sonnet Vii- I Carved Your Name On My Heart Comments

Rating: 4.9

My beats ceased
When you left me alone……………………
My heart cried
In a monotonous tone………………………..
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Yash Shinde
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B. V. Dahlen 27 September 2015

Beautiful. More More More

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Hans Vr 30 November 2014

Superb love poem, moving the reader in a big way.

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Tadasha Tripathy 30 May 2014

Simply wow! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

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Shahzia Batool 15 May 2014

very good write up...may i suggest something? if you leave thinking about sonnet here, then you can modify the couplet into the triplet, And in grief of being separated apart, in my body I plunged your love's dart And carved your beautiful name in my still heart but it's a humble suggestion being the student of poetry myself...

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Lovely poem! It's beautiful! Showing passion. Amazing! (:

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Yash Shinde 19 March 2014

Thanks everyone for your appreciation and feedback- Yash Shinde

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Raihana Abdul Jabbar 30 October 2012

Awesome imagination.. Loved the images you created with roses, dews and garden.. :) Lovely!

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Guy Lip-more 29 October 2012

Loved this, very good write.......

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As you have carved 'your name' on your heart, it is sure to bleed for some time and the beats will be louder. Let this separation tone your longing and upgrade the thought plank further. If the food of love is suffering, every lover must love on...

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Accassa Stokes 26 October 2012

Beautiful, I like this one sir :)

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Sokal Roy 26 October 2012

nice poem, Keep it up; and, thanks for sharing it with us.

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Sokal Roy 26 October 2012

nice poem, Keep it up; and, thanks for sharing it with us.

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Pregnant with a passion that is almost suicidal. Well done my friend!

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Edward Kofi Louis 25 October 2012

A very nice piece of work. Keep it up; and, thanks for sharing it with us. E.K.L.

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Harshal Joshi 25 October 2012

very very bold and romantic revels deep love and pain i like the way it is written.

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Dave Walker 24 October 2012

A powerful poem, like it, a great write.

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Rm. Shanmugam Chettiar 23 October 2012

the poem has served its purpose. you may change dew to dews. i appreciate your skill and conveying poer.

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Bethany M. 23 October 2012

This poem is beautiful..... Obviously not the most uplifting poem but so many times it seems that the sad relatable poems are the best. I absolutely love it

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Mark Dillon 23 October 2012

Short, simple and good writing, it coveys the message well, Yash, nice one

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isam Abdelrahman 23 October 2012

Incredible compared to the young age. Go ahead Yash

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Yash Shinde

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