My beats ceased
When you left me alone……………………
My heart cried
In a monotonous tone………………………..
...
Read full text
very good write up...may i suggest something? if you leave thinking about sonnet here, then you can modify the couplet into the triplet, And in grief of being separated apart, in my body I plunged your love's dart And carved your beautiful name in my still heart but it's a humble suggestion being the student of poetry myself...
Lovely poem! It's beautiful! Showing passion. Amazing! (:
Awesome imagination.. Loved the images you created with roses, dews and garden.. :) Lovely!
As you have carved 'your name' on your heart, it is sure to bleed for some time and the beats will be louder. Let this separation tone your longing and upgrade the thought plank further. If the food of love is suffering, every lover must love on...
Pregnant with a passion that is almost suicidal. Well done my friend!
A very nice piece of work. Keep it up; and, thanks for sharing it with us. E.K.L.
very very bold and romantic revels deep love and pain i like the way it is written.
the poem has served its purpose. you may change dew to dews. i appreciate your skill and conveying poer.
This poem is beautiful..... Obviously not the most uplifting poem but so many times it seems that the sad relatable poems are the best. I absolutely love it
Short, simple and good writing, it coveys the message well, Yash, nice one
Beautiful. More More More