Sonnet Iv-Sad Strain Of A Mother's Heart Comments

a delicate issue but very important to raise in writing...life is too short for saying thanks to her, there's no place of such roughness! touching!

Very touching. I love it. amazing poem. (:

Thanks everyone for your appreciation and feedback- Yash Shinde

When we think of the ingratitude shown to our mothers, everyone has to put his head in shame.... How much of love has been 'wasted' on us by these poor mothers! I think a mother's heart is the largest vessel which can hold meaureless gallons of love..! A great poem.... Yash!

Barring a few every mortal is thus. Indeed we have to remain anguished over the dismal truth. ..has forgotten his mother the one who nurtured him.. What an irony of life!

There is no heart quite like a mother's heart. You have expressed this reality very well!

You compose so well for one so young, well done Yash.

Friend you have the talent All the best I believe you have a bright future Your poems and sonnets will make it

Hi, You asked for feedback and here's one simple note on a piece I enjoyed: I think it's stronger if you remove separated. A many syllable word on the already longest line whose meaning is implied by apart, so not needed, and the rhythm is stronger without it.

very nice. much emotion and passion in this creation.

A good good piece but i think the last stanza needs a little more passion or heartache to me.... you are one exceptional writer... seriously... if you carry on you will be the one to watch....bravo

My frnd.. your attempt is very nice. keep it up with ur study.

good attempt and is a very great poem

A mother's sad tale is very aptly put into poetry. Good poem

The light knitting bright, and her eyes like the sun from the hill rise from the darkness, so gently to the sky till bird fly over the world for the excitement, Mother's touch as soft as cotton cloud swipe the wind with her words blowing our mind, and mother is everything when we cry happy she make us stand tall... I love your poem, you done very good, your mom should read this poem_Soul

really well presented.. great work from one so young..

Good sentiment. Good grammar with well structured verses. Well done, keep writing.

Very good write - well rhymed.

Very true. It's an experience of life. The sad tune touched me. Thanks Yash for inviting me.

a very heart touching poem dear! you wrote it so beautifully and thanks for sharing!