Sonnet Iii-Ocean Of Life Comments

often do we get lost in our lives, , , but one day we realize that we were never really lost, , , those tough days that we have are like a source that feeds us for rest of our lives, , , those are the moments where we learn the most, , , , a beautiful poem, , , i like the ending the most, , , ,

It's nice and thought provoking. We row the boat of our life in the ocean of time, but the control is not in our hands.

At 16 you are on a fast track to becoming a gifted poet. Rich with imagery and metaphors and many profoundly written lines- a very advanced write, very good

I am so inspired by your works. I have two poems that I would like for you to read. The Human Chain and A Word Spoken. Thanks and enjoyed your poem once again.

Thanks everyone for your appreciation and feedback- Yash Shinde

Yash, Don't try to escape the life. In the ocean also it will definitely search you. Be brave to reach the end.Okay. Best wishes.

That is a very strong emotion you are portraying and the feeling I get from it is lost and it seems that the character in the poem has given up hope. I really like the way you've written this, it is truely amazing! :)

the reality of life, beautifuly described..

I really enjoyed this poem. Actually, my friend recommended reading your work and I'm glad I did. This poem brings to life such an amazing image in my head, which is rare for me. I have a weakness for the ocean, so I might be a tad bit biased, nevertheless, this is a great piece of poetry. Thank you for sharing it!

Very imaginative, dear Yash. Of course, this is where in the world of imagination that a poet starts to paint his thoughts. Thanks for sharing this great work.

Fantastic imagination though pessimistic! Sadder poets write better lines and you have done it over here. The ocean of life may soon make a pearl out of you and the act of swallowing is a mere phase of subdued concern. Enterprising poem of your kind!

Swimming in the sea of sadness yet surging with significance! Well done my friend!

I agree with most of the poems here, great poem!

Nice poem. I like it especially the allusion to Jean Jacques Rosseau

Yash, , , you truly are one of the most natural poets i have ever read, there is such woe in your words and the freedom with restraints is tackled with a unique angle.... the only part which i struggled with a bit and i am no expert but you did ask for honest reviews was the last two lines sit too close in ryhme with the second from last stanza... to make it more comfortable in my humble opinion i would maybe end like... and took away the bosom of my god………….. and then the ocean swallowed me, like a clod ceased my beats, and hid me under its sod……… Just a suggestion but breaks the patter comfortably to me... other than that a perfect piece of poetry tyvm karen

poem describes the illusion of life, the bubble happiness and pleasures which we run behind and the things that take us away from god and godliness.............. -yash shinde (poet)

very beautifully expressed... enjoyed reading this one too.

A good attempt.It gives courage, self confidence etc.congrats

Have courage to cross the illusion. Very philosophical. nice poem

A good write, well rhymed.