Wednesday, September 3, 2008

Song To A Drifter Comments

Rating: 4.9

Like the wind breathes upon the leaves
Behind are left sweet memories
You live in my heart, soul and mind
In the world you own, now left behind
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Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black
COMMENTS
Scarborough Gypsy 24 November 2009

Oh! How I love the thought of being unanchored. I can smell the salty air and feel the sea breaze blowing through my hair as I watch the distant sails of his boat become smaller and smaller. Beautiful poem. You have captured so much and this gypsy drifted away on the poems emotions and imagery.Thank You

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Andrew Blakemore 22 August 2009

A beautifully written piece Lorraine, a pleasure to read. Best wishes, Andrew

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Deborah Cromer 29 June 2009

Intensely beautiful! Vivid and descriptive, I can feel sadness and strength in it. There is a hint of understanding and acceptance, but also of wonder. Very, very good. DC

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Phillip, My poem is about the wind and the yearning to be free.I've never been a drifter so it would be difficult to write from that perspective.

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ppp sss 24 April 2009

While I stumble a bit over the last two lines, I find the whole idea of this piece enchanting! I wonder if you have written another perhaps, from the drifter's point of view?

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Rosalita Fernandez 11 April 2009

top marks for a wonderful poem, you captured everything so beautifully!

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Edgar Andrade Baguio 23 September 2008

Now, this is what I call 'simply beautiful'. It is full of tender emotions of the persona. The touch of pure sincerity and caress that reaches out to humanity. A 10 for you my friend.

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Elle Lazarus 17 September 2008

It was purely beautiful.

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James B. Earley 14 September 2008

A 'drifter' is by nature......a drifter....and..therefore....may return....someday. And then?

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Greenwolfe 1962 06 September 2008

This song to a drifter is a special thing. I would have given it a 10 if it was perfect. It wasn't, so it only gets a 9. GW62

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ngaio beck 05 September 2008

another beautiful interlude.I perceive you are a true women in the classic sense.Today 'A pearl of great price'

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Kathleen West 04 September 2008

Beautiful and wistful poem. If you love someone set them free......but it does it open-ended for him to come back. I like your writing style. Thanks for sharing.

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Joseph Poewhit 03 September 2008

Some people like that in life-they just drift

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Cordell Rich 03 September 2008

Good Poem. I really like the standard verse. I an not very good at it myself. I think I do well with free verse but then everyone things they do well with free verse. But when i try to write a structured poem as you have, mine seem to sound like second graders wrote it. Good Job.

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