Song Of The Desert Thorn Comments

You are using what the Minnesota poet Robert Bly called the SKINNY line for a variety of your poems. He was referring to poems by Pablo Neruda and they were all in his BOOKS OF ODES. Now almost all of those poems are praise songs and the skinny lines helped him to pick up speed in detailing what delighted him. But your skinny line does not necessarily produce speed of delivery. But it does make the poems remarkably open and honest.There's no place for words to hide or get lost. Everything is transparent. In this poem images and feelings are weak, get weaker, dissolve, disappear, nothing left. It's honest... and desolate.