Solitary Confinement Comments

nice work it has a power to convey the message of love and loving.

dear ameer, the poem doesn't complicate enough to develop as an independent statement of art or lamentation............!

The title is clever and the thoughts are strong. I confess modern style is not my cup of tea - my head is still buried in the works of older poets, as you can probably tell from my work. As a start it certainly has strength and character, I wish you every success with it, and all those that follow. Patrick

this s a nice one...its not the length of the poem that counts but the meaning...ths is a good start for a promising poems... CHEERS...

A wonderful start. In a little amount of words u seemed to have poured out ur feelings into this poem. It gives of a pretty clear image of what ur trying to say. Excellent piece....Keep writing: -)

I know we are often encouraged to minimalise with our words. Say so much with so little. I don't often agree with that doctrine. Rather a middle ground with more metaphor, at the risk of over emphasis. I think your sentiments are clear enough Ameer, but don't think the piece is worthy of all the plaudits. Sometimes people are overly nice when asked to visit a stranger's work. Without more of your work to make a real comparison, I'll have to sit on the fence. All the best Danny

deep feelings expressed in few words...good job! i'm looking forward to seeing more of your poetry.

I gave it an 8 and recommend it. The content is compelling. I would have given it a 9 if the structure you chose had been mor suitable. In any writing like this, some words and lines are more important than others. It makes the poem special if you place the important words and lines in a way that increases their impact. You just lined them up down the page. By what method, I could not tell. Always, take note of this, if you intend to do this often. It can really affect the reader positively or negatively.

i love this poem i can really relate i hope to read some more of ur work in the future 10

very nicely written. :)

Well written. Enjoyed it.

Pretty deep... thought provoking... great, thanks Athena *** words will change the world ***

Sabash! (well done) i enjoyed reading this poem. a very good poem. keep writing.

Hi Ameer. very strong for your first peice well put together with a powerful message plain to see. well worthy of a 10 Regards Dave T.

goood meaningful poem...enjoyed..keep going

Ameer This is indeed powerful. There can be no clearer statement of the cost of seperation and love. Seperation and it aftermath describes human character as does love. The two are the heart of the human adventure and is what has made the human species prosper.

i love the ending it rocks 'perform me euthanasia, free me alas'

not bad. It needs to have more purpose. A clearer story, per se'. It could also be much better if it were a bit longer.

nicely written, can feel the pain of separation... you must write more... this was good. atleast to me it was...

nice work, keep it up