Here, this smudge of blood,
Of a tender boy of eleven,
Soaked thru the tarmac,
Yet to be dried, still wet and warm!
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Nice way of presentation and choosing of words made this poem perfect...and touched my heart....
Looking at the evil heart of men and the work of their cruelty! My heart weeps for the mother of the child. Thanks for sharing this tragic poem. Not only do we as poets share the good times and the beautiful moments, but sad times as this.
the situation is entirely written with profound of quest - thought of slaughtering the innocent for reaping crooked desires by the sloths in dark side of the world......the content holds true emotions along with the mode of words.
Really it's a touching one. blood steaming lines............wonderful, Nooredeen ji.
Great imagery...reads like it might make a better short story :)
That is a very powerful piece of poetry you have there, I like the emphasis on his innoncence, sorry its taken me over a year to get back to you :)
its really down to earth and straight forward in a subtle way. i like it.
Intense! Like how when I started reading it, it was like a story unfolding and out of nowhere bam! Ur hit with a surprise twist of fate in the story and it comes to a painful end. I like it! :)
i love it the way its written with the repetitive lines keeps your attention
Nooruddeen, Read your poem and believed every dripping word!
Really great writing that i could visualise. heart sinks into sadness. poignant act of indignant minds. Read my poems also and post comments. .
Let me begin by saying, it's a wonderful poem. Written in a style of your own. Very nice choice of lexis. Gripping. The best part is the message. It can't be driven home more forcefully. Great write. Thanks for sharing. Hope to read more of yours.
I lived in Chicago and saw many a drive by killings of innocent children. And the Viet Nam war. Where millions of boys and women died. Sin does not discriminate, it is everywhere! It lives in the heart of all mankind. Sad poem of what is. God Bless
it's amazing how the right words can make this most wrong situation burst to life on my screen. really well done - such a difficult topic to write about...
Dang that was almost really hard to read because of how intense that was... Great work though keep it up man
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