Monday, June 15, 2009

Smudge Of Blood Comments

Rating: 4.7

Here, this smudge of blood,
Of a tender boy of eleven,
Soaked thru the tarmac,
Yet to be dried, still wet and warm!
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Nooruddeen Mathilakathveetil
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Unnikrishnan E S 06 January 2021

Terrorism despised

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Farisa Haleel 04 May 2016

Nice way of presentation and choosing of words made this poem perfect...and touched my heart....

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Elisha Wall 20 January 2015

Looking at the evil heart of men and the work of their cruelty! My heart weeps for the mother of the child. Thanks for sharing this tragic poem. Not only do we as poets share the good times and the beautiful moments, but sad times as this.

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Vishal Sharma 09 July 2013

most commented poem on poemhunter i think

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Swetha Vanakayalapati 11 June 2012

the situation is entirely written with profound of quest - thought of slaughtering the innocent for reaping crooked desires by the sloths in dark side of the world......the content holds true emotions along with the mode of words.

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Johnathan Juarez 16 May 2012

really good grasp on the story

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Really it's a touching one. blood steaming lines............wonderful, Nooredeen ji.

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Jeska bella 21 March 2012

hay nice can you read and coment on mine plz thanks jeska

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Poet Dragon 15 March 2012

Great imagery...reads like it might make a better short story :)

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Mz February 09 December 2011

That is a very powerful piece of poetry you have there, I like the emphasis on his innoncence, sorry its taken me over a year to get back to you :)

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Archangel Lucifer 21 September 2011

its really down to earth and straight forward in a subtle way. i like it.

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Audrey O'shea 11 March 2011

Intense! Like how when I started reading it, it was like a story unfolding and out of nowhere bam! Ur hit with a surprise twist of fate in the story and it comes to a painful end. I like it! :)

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Dorian Melody 11 March 2011

i love it the way its written with the repetitive lines keeps your attention

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Stephen Gregory 21 February 2011

Nooruddeen, Read your poem and believed every dripping word!

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Narayanan Ramakrishnan 17 February 2011

Really great writing that i could visualise. heart sinks into sadness. poignant act of indignant minds. Read my poems also and post comments. .

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Saju Abraham 16 February 2011

Let me begin by saying, it's a wonderful poem. Written in a style of your own. Very nice choice of lexis. Gripping. The best part is the message. It can't be driven home more forcefully. Great write. Thanks for sharing. Hope to read more of yours.

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Linda Winchell 13 February 2011

I lived in Chicago and saw many a drive by killings of innocent children. And the Viet Nam war. Where millions of boys and women died. Sin does not discriminate, it is everywhere! It lives in the heart of all mankind. Sad poem of what is. God Bless

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Hannah Barham 13 February 2011

it's amazing how the right words can make this most wrong situation burst to life on my screen. really well done - such a difficult topic to write about...

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Deja Rupp 12 January 2011

Dang that was almost really hard to read because of how intense that was... Great work though keep it up man

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KB & CO. 29 December 2010

Sad, truthful pain..heart felt

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