Wednesday, September 12, 2007

Smile Comments

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Sleep has no use to me,
let dearth flow in the water,
suffuse the air with smog,
but do not take away your smile.
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daughter of a seafoam
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Original Unknown Girl 17 September 2007

Absolutely beautiful.... loved this poem. HG: -) xx

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Red Blooded Black Hearted 16 September 2007

Umm, what do you need feedback for? Your poetry is wonderful. That poem had so muh heart and emotion to it. It was wonderful. Your choice of words and phrases was sublime. Great work and keep writing: -)

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Ada Shelley 15 September 2007

And you r asking for FEEDBACK? ? You're a wonderful poet! Just a suggestion - try not to repeat yourself that often. but otherwise you're great!

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